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Title: Midwinter

Author: randomalia

Pairing: Gen

Word Count: 100

Rating: G

Items used: scuff marks

Note: set during PoA; written for the shack_challenge and only posted there.

 

Midwinter. The snow fell thick on the air, the ancient castle halls aching with watchful silence. Remus followed old paths, imagined the wear on the stones.

We walked this way when...

The tunnel was smaller, tasting of dirt and the stillness of forgotten secrets. He bent low, unsteady fingers brushing against damp walls and frozen time.

We stopped here when...

Brittle wind made the shack shiver, a soft wailing in broken corners. Remus straightened, each familiar scent and line a sudden clutch in his belly.

There.

James laughing, and a bark that rang in the air...

Footsteps in the dust.

 

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From:moonfruituk
Date:June 3rd, 2004 05:57 pm (UTC)
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*shiver*

This captures everything that can be so good about drabbles - there's not much room for plot, but dammit, they can be incredibly evocative and mood driven, and really make you feel. And this is one of the good ones.

My like. Thanks for this.
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From:randomalia
Date:June 4th, 2004 03:41 pm (UTC)
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Thank you! I know exactly what you mean about drabbles, they're whittled down to be like an arrow that goes straight to the heart of something, which can be quite powerful.

I'm glad you enjoyed it :)
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From:moonfruituk
Date:June 5th, 2004 05:30 am (UTC)
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Exactly - every word has more power coz there's so few of them. So, in this one, just the word There is sooo evocative.
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